This is my first day to write something in this blog . I'd like to share something to my classmate. I love this blog so much ! But how? How to apply this blog?Maybe many classmates are interested in this too.
First, you must apply a gmail account.
Second, when you have a gmail account, go to the main page then click to "see more" and you will see many icons in the pages, choose Blogger and click into it.
The third, When you go into the blog, it will ask you to create a name, a title name then continue, you can write something in the blog.
It's not hard to apply a blog, but you may cost some times to fill some forms , steps by steps, then you will get a lot of fun . It's worth for you to do that. Have fun everybody !
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ReplyDeleteFirst, your audience is your classmates and the teacher. Most, if not all, of your audience already knows how to do this, so it is not a good topic. Second, if it were a good topic, the content is too basic. Imagine that you do not know how to create a Blogspot blog, would reading these instructions help you? For example, “First, you must apply [for] a Gmail account.” How do I do that?
I want you to rewrite this. Your new audience is going to be people at CEC who do not know how to set up a Blogspot blog. I’m not completely sure how the students will see it, but I may post it in my classroom, post it in the ESL computer lab, or I might make copies to distribute to students in, say, other writing classes.
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You do have clear — albeit* incomplete — separate steps to follow. However, you almost ignored English grammar, so each step is harder to follow than it should be. For a specific example, see “GRAMMAR AND VOCABULARY,”
GRAMMAR AND VOCABULARY
I am only going to choose one of your steps. I want you to read the rest of what you wrote, reread it, and then reread it again. Continue rereading your own writing until you are sure that it does not contain mistakes.
You wrote “Second, when you have a gmail account, go to the main page then click to "see more" and you will see many icons in the pages, choose Blogger and click into it.” I would have written this: Second, when you have a Gmail account, go to the main page by clicking ___________________ , and then click "see more." You will see many icons on the page. Click “Blogger.”
Al-be-it conj.
Even though; although; notwithstanding: clear albeit cold weather.
American Heritage Dictionary, Fourth Edition. Copyright © 2002
It was very helpful for me when you taught me how to make the Blog in our class. Please let me know how to make the "My Blog List".
ReplyDeleteWhere are your other writing assignments? Why didn't you rewrite these instructions? I wrote:
ReplyDeleteGRAMMAR AND VOCABULARY
I am only going to choose one of your steps. I want you to read the rest of what you wrote, reread it, and then reread it again. Continue rereading your own writing until you are sure that it does not contain mistakes.
You wrote “Second, when you have a gmail account, go to the main page then click to "see more" and you will see many icons in the pages, choose Blogger and click into it.” I would have written this: Second, when you have a Gmail account, go to the main page by clicking ___________________ , and then click "see more." You will see many icons on the page. Click “Blogger.”
Please do the work that you are supposed to do.
I will rewrite this weekend. Thanks!
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ReplyDeleteIt's easy for people to catch up what you wrote. I think it's very useful for a person who don't know how to creat their blogs.
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The second paragraph is very shorter than other paragraphs. You can introduce the details of how to appay for a gamil account.
Grammar and vocabulary
It's not hard to apply a blog, but you may cost some times to fill some forms , steps by steps, then you will get a lot of fun . It's worth for you to do that. Have fun everybody !
Even though it's easy to apply for a blog, you must spend much time to fill in the blanks step by step. It's very worth for you applying for it because you will get a lot of fun after you finish this job.